HELP!!! Essay:(
I'm having to write an argumentative essay for school. I decided to make my own topic sentence since the options given did not appeal to me. The problem is that I am at a loss for wqords. I LOVE this topic.. and have so much to say, but as my friend say: " You start to thinking too hard anout things and get too complicated to put it into words". Unfortunately she is right, and I need help with this! So far all I have is this:
"In a world where human rights are constantly fought, the majority of people seem to have forgotten about a non-human, sentient race whose rights have been completely violated. This race has been subjected to numerous cruelties, yet few people care to solve the dilemma. The animal race has quietly suffered through factory farms, slaughterhouses, batting cages, and many other forms of torture. Until recently, few people realize what heinous treatment animals are put through.
In olden days animals were allowed to live their lives peacefully and happily until they got old and were killed for meat. Cows spent their days grazing in pastures, pigs strolling in their pens. Sunlight, water, and compassion were given to animals without a second thought. However, nowadays Cows are forced to live in factory farms, never seeing sunlight until they are being transported to a slaughterhouse. Although the normal life span of a cow is 20 years, they are killed after 5 years since their milk production decreased, making it unprofitable to leave the cow alive. Pigs live in cages so small they face difficulty in turning around. The transportation to slaughterhouses is undeniably cruel. “Crammed together, animals must stand in their excrement while exposed to extreme temperatures in open trucks, sometimes freezing to the trailer. Approximately 200,000 pigs arrive dead at U.S. slaughter plants each year; many of these deaths are caused by a lack of ventilation on trucks in hot weather” Upon reaching their destination, the cruelest part of their inhumane treatment is ...."
I don't know where to go from there... Any ideas??
Get into how factory farming is bad for us as well (ie contaminated water, ingesting more hormones/antibiotics), that'll fit in nicely with a tie in to your topic sentence when you repeat it in the close! ;)b
Thanks Hanashi!
I finally managed to finish the essay, its not the best... but I tried. If y'all care to see it I posted it on my blog:
www.conquerbsymiling.blogspot.com